Notes From A Fantasy/Romance Writer: How To Write A Great Love Scene

How to write a great love scene in novel? I should have ended the title of this article with a question mark, because this truth is, I don’t know what makes a love scene in a book, great. And I’m not talking about sex scenes in a book. I’m talking about those moments when the man and the woman connect in such a way that makes the readers swoon.

How does one do that?

Is there a school or class out there that teaches this? There probably are such classes, but I’m not one to believe that Jane Austen ever took such a class.

Then how did she do it? And how have writers from ages passed formed such memorable romances on paper?

I’m inclined to believe it has something to do with connection and hope – meaning, how well the audience has connected emotionally with the hero and heroine (do you root for them? do you hope deeply they will be together?), and how much the hero and heroine have connected with each other.

And I guess this comes down to building great chemistry between the two lovers (not to mention a backdrop of great conflict – they just have to be a part for a time, don’t they?)

Which brings me to the topic of Gilead and Emmy, in my book, The Last King. I struggle with several added worries: how resistant audiences might be to having a black couple be the main focus of a romance, concerns about my own writing capabilities (am I any good?), but I especially I worry about the fact that I have written and published 300 pages of my episodic novel so far, and  episode #6 is the first time the hero is uttering anything remotely romantic to the heroine – this after 300 pages of action so far!

Are audiences willing to wait that long for just a confession? To say nothing of the fact that they are not remotely together as a couple.

What’s more complicated, is that page  within those 300 pages, this is only the first confession of love from the hero, the first time the hero and heroine have a moment to confront the fact that there’s is a love story. I have purposely delayed any intense connection between them, yet, as I am seeking a slow build.

But will this work?

And what will audiences think of a male hero who is capable of great good, but also intense cruelty? What to do when (as in episode #6), Gilead’s being rejected makes him turn on the heroine emotionally for a time?

And what would Jane Austen have done in this case?


I don’t know. What I do know is that I have always loved great romances such as Pride and Prejudice, Gone with the Wind, and Romeo and Juliet, and have wanted to imitate their brilliance.

No, I don’t pretend my book is in the same vein as these greats, but I want to be onto something big, to write a memorable love story, with memorable love scenes, despite having a difficult male lead (Oh, Gilead!)

I guess the only thing a writer can do is to keep writing, and not worry about the results. Be they good or bad. Right or wrong.

Yes, maybe that’s how a person eventually writes a great love scene; they plug away at the computer screen, writing and re-writing, building connection with their two protagonists, and all the while just hoping for the best.

I’d love to hear any feedback from romance writers about how they write great love scenes.

And in the meantime, Happy New Year!



Some notes about the HOST OF YAMINATODAY.COM – A. Yamina Collins

A. Yamina Collins is the author of the fantasy/romance novel The Last King, A modern-day love story about a young woman innocently caught in a war between two age-old nemesis: God, and immortal beings whose ancestors ate from the Tree of Life in the Garden of Eden.

The Last Kinghas already been in Amazon’s Top 100 Bestseller’s list in Fantasy, Sciencefiction, Women’s Fiction Literature and Christian Women’s Literature.

Twenty-eight year Emmy Hughes has never quite fit in—she’s six feet tall, dark-skinned, and daydreams of being Galadriel from Lord of the Rings. But when she is badly injured in a car accident that kills her mother, Emmy does not dream of fantastical worlds anymore—she just wants her shattered life to be normal again.

Unfortunately, normalcy is the last thing in store for her once she meets Lake George’s newest arrival, Dr. Gilead Knightly. Granted immortality from a line of people whose Great Ancestor marched into the Garden of Eden and ate from the Tree of Life, Gilead has been alive for centuries and has met everyone from Nubian kings to Napoleon.

But Gilead and his eccentric family are also hunted beings because God considers the Edenites’ possession of immortality to be theft. And for thousands of years He has dealt with their transgression by sending each of them a “Glitch” —an unsuspecting human meant to retrieve this stolen “property” of immortality and kill them off.

When Emmy discovers that she is Gilead’s Glitch, she is not only thrown into a world of immortals who eat bone marrow, panthers who read minds, and a family whose blood is made of pulsing gold, but she finds herself the target of Gilead’s vengeance: he must get rid of her before she gets rid of him.

Easier said than done. Because Glitches are not only an Edenite’s greatest threat—they’re also their greatest love.


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